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Advent: Gaia's Renewal - The Shipwrights and The Dragons
« on: January 29, 2010, 05:35:16 pm »
The small ship glided through the water, a shallow thing not much larger than a fishing boat, with a large sail bearing a rich design on richer royal blue silk.  Its (for want of a better word) 'captain' surveyed the shoreline through a spyglass crafted from coral.  The ship bore one oar with two paddles, for use if the large sail was lost.  It was otherwise driven by a single man manipulating the rigging that tied the sail to the mast and the mast to the bottom of the ship.  By constantly moving the sail to and fro, the ship caught the wind, even the slightest breeze, and moved along the water leaving barely a ripple. 

The shoreline was a tangle of tropical trees and frond-covered undergrowth, forming a barrier that even the strongest sunlight couldn't break through.  The captain looked through the spyglass, searching the shoreline diligently.  He barked an order to the man controlling the sail, who heaved on the ropes and brought the small ship about to make another pass.  The island they were watching was hundreds of miles long, but composed of cliffs stretching nearly the whole length of the island, leaving a scant few miles of beach to land on.

The island's position marked the start of a stretch of ocean that was routinely sailed by the Shipwrights. The Shipwrights were a sea-faring people, literally so.  They were possibly the only known people on the planet who got landsick.  They were born on water, on their great floating towns and villages built out of fleets of older ships retired from active service, that were tied together with ropes, seaweed and vines, and straddled by gangplanks and bridges.  The entire town or village could move among calmer waters as one vessel, and in rougher waters, the ships were untied and sailed separately until the storm abated.  The towns and villages were usually docked to nearby islands that served for providing fresh food, for when the Shipwrights were fed up of fish or aquatic plants.  They had great distilleries aboard their floating communities that provided them with fresh water, and the salt gathered from this process was used as spice or traded to other nations, when the Shipwrights encountered them.

The 'captain' of the little vessel, one Mata-I Otaw, was really a fisherman from one of the Shipwright's floating villages who had volunteered into naval service when the island his village was docked to was attacked by an army from the north. The army bore the same colours as those worn by the Luciferi, the blond-haired, green-eyed people from the lands north of the Open Ocean, who had recently established a colony on some of the islands that bordered the Shipwright’s waters. 

The Luciferi colony had been met with warm welcome from Otaw's town when it was first established.  They leant help to the fledgling colony and provided food and trade to bolster the community.  However, it was later proved that the intentions of the Luciferi had not been as benign.

A village hunting party had disappeared on the island, and their village attacked by the Luciferi, using devices which spewed fire that could burn along water and was seemingly unquenchable.  A small ship, commandeered by the Luciferi colonists, had been seen landing on the island currently watched by 'Captain' Otaw and his son, Mata-I Kara, who was being forcefully employed by his father as the ship’s single crew member.  Otaw believed that the colonists had designs on the other islands in the archipelago.

His job was to watch the island and bring word to the town if he saw anything suspicious.  He reasoned that as the island in question was sheer cliff-face for most of its length, then the only place they could land a ship for supplies or transport would be the few miles of beach that stretched along the island’s southern coast.  However, his prolonged vigil of these few miles of sandy beach had so far proved fruitless.  All he had to report was that there was a track burnt through the forest where the colonists had landed, and the ship they had stolen had been left abandoned and empty.

Crewman Mata-I Kara looked around at the empty and lifeless beach, and up at his father, staring through his coral spyglass as if he could force the dense forest apart with just his gaze.

Tying down the ropes that held the sail in position, he looked again at the beach.  Sighing, he turned to his father.

"Dad."  He said, breaking the silence that they had maintained for hours.

His father remained silent, staring straight ahead.  Kara sighed again, and rolled his eyes.

"Captain." He said, through gritted teeth.  This time his father lowered the spyglass and looked down at him.

"Will you shut it!?  You'll bring the 'ole shipload of 'em down on us!" Otaw shouted at Kara, certainly louder than his son had been.

"But we've been tacking up and down this stretch of beach since sun-up!  They're not here anymore!"  Kara replied, hissing under his breath.

"D'you see that ship!?  D'you see it!?" His father blared back at him, gesturing furiously towards the scuttled ship that lay on the beach.  Kara forced himself to nod.  "They couldn't get off the island without that ship, so they must still be 'ere!  An' I'm gonna catch 'em at it, mark my words!  If one of those eel-ridden land-dwellers sets one foot on that sand, they're gettin' a dart straight in the neck, let me tell you!"  To emphasize his point, he picked up his weapon of choice, a blowpipe and quiver of darts crafted from stingray spines.  For added potency they were also tipped in venom from sea snakes that the Shipwrights reared on their floating farms.  One dart was enough to kill, and Otaw was a deadly aim.  He practised by shooting at flying fish as they passed by his fishing vessel.

Mata-I Kara sighed again and, untying the ropes, wrapped them around his wrist to take full control of the sail.  He brought the little ship about once more, to make yet another pass of the beach.

~~~

Quite a few years ago now, I was part of a forum called Golden Sun: Alchemy's Legacy, which, in fact, I was introduced to shortly after I joined GSR's forums.  It was the first experience I'd had with roleplay and creative writing in that manner, and whilst at first, looking back, I was pretty dire, I got better at it.  A couple of years passed and eventually the storyline fell through, and while I was on holiday, the administrator re-vamped the story with a new setting he called "Aftermath: Gaia's Renewal".

This was set in the year 8000 on our own planet, after a unspecified war had brought the human race to near extinction, and now they had seperated into racial groups and founded new civilizations and empires.  Their level of technology was on par with that of Golden Sun, but with some differences, such as advanced rail travel and communications in certain areas.

At first I was a bit dubious about the setting, but in time I grew to love it, and when the administrator abandoned the concept, Saki and I took over and made it our own.  We tried to reinstate both A:GR and GS:AL, but both projects died.  However, I remembered all the ideas I'd had for A:GR, and I wrote down information about the setting, creating new bits, cutting out old bits, mapping the world, naming the races...

... Until about a month ago I decided I ought to take it back out of my head and put it on paper.  This is the result.  There's a -lot- more to come, but I don't want to swamp everyone with it at once, so, if it proves to be interesting to at least a few people around here, I'll post more as it's written.

As for the name, I spent a long time trying to think of what I could call it, before chancing upon the word "Advent".  Taken from Latin, its roots lie in 'ad veni', or 'to come', such as we call the time leading up to Christmas the 'Advent' as it looks to the coming of Christ.  So, this isn't the Aftermath of Gaia's Renewal.  This is its Advent.

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Re: Advent: Gaia's Renewal - The Shipwrights and The Dragons
« Reply #1 on: January 30, 2010, 01:31:50 am »
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Re: Advent: Gaia's Renewal - The Shipwrights and The Dragons
« Reply #2 on: January 30, 2010, 10:09:46 am »
The vessel had just passed the splintered timbers of the scuttled ship when a bolt of flame burst from the dense forest and flew through the air, striking the little ship's sail and burning a hole right through it.  Derived of wind power, the ship floundered as Otaw struggled to keep himself from falling into the water.  Kara heaved on the ropes to swing the mast around to his father, allowing him to grab hold of it.  Turning in his seat, he seized the oar and plunged it into the water, pushing the ship through the water and narrowly avoiding a second bolt of flame, this time aimed at the ship's hull.

The flame fell harmlessly into the water, but wasn't put out.  Instead, as the water churned, it spread the fire along its surface, bringing it dangerously close to the ship.  Kara forced the ship forwards with all his strength, while Otaw fired darts in the direction that the fire had come from.  A cry of pain revealed that at least one had hit a target.  Otaw dropped another dart into the blowpipe, one eye constantly on the little singed opening in the forest that smouldered where the fiery bolt had passed through it.  Light fell on the side of the fire-spewing machine, betraying its position.  When a Luciferi head appeared alongside the machine, pushing it through the undergrowth, Otaw blew hard on the pipe, sending a dart directly into the neck of the Luciferis man.  The machine was turned around by an unseen hand and a third shot tore through the leaves, leaving a trail of sparks as it streaked towards the little vessel.  Otaw stumbled as the bolt of flame flew past him, and fell into the water.  Kara dropped the ropes and leant over the side of the boat to pull his father back on board.  A fourth shot was fired, and struck the boat directly.  Kara was forced to leap into the water as flames caught the timbers and began to spread up the tarred ropes.

He pushed himself through the water towards his father, who was trying to avoid the flames that burned on the surface of the water.  Looking at his son, he nodded once, took a sharp breath, and dove beneath the flames that surrounded them, emerging unscathed on the side nearest the shore.  Kara followed after a brief moment.

As he resurfaced and blinked the water from his eyes, he saw his father being held by the shoulder with a short, curved sword at his neck, held by one of the Luciferis men.  A second soldier stepped out from the trees and waited calmly at the water's edge for Kara to climb up onto the beach.  Having nowhere to run or swim to, Kara pulled himself up onto the sand, where the soldier forced his arms behind him and clasped a metal bracer around each wrist, chained in the middle.  He was led over to his father, who had been similarly restrained, his blowpipe lying waterlogged on the sand.





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Re: Advent: Gaia's Renewal - The Shipwrights and The Dragons
« Reply #4 on: February 01, 2010, 09:56:10 am »
The two soldiers spoke curtly to each other in their own language, which sounded as harsh and disciplined as the two soldiers looked.  Kara knew a few simple phrases of the tongue, having picked up a few lessons from the colonists.  His father turned to him and motioned with his eyes in the direction of the soldiers.

"What they sayin'?" He whispered, struggling against the manacles.  He was far too proud to learn any language that was used by land-dwellers.  Kara concentrated on the clipped, quick tones exchanged between the two men.

"I think they're gonna take us to their camp."  He said after a few sentences had passed between the Luciferi.  The soldier that had bound his wrists turned his head towards the two and spoke to them in his best attempt at the Shipwright's complex tongue.

"Captain- No, Admiral want you at camp.  Come, peace."  He gestured towards the gap in the trees, indicating they should walk of their own accord.  His companion half-sheathed his sword.  Kara interpreted from this that they weren't going to force them but certainly wouldn't hesitate to strike should they not co-operate.

Turning back to his father, he said; "They want us to come with them.  They're not going to force us, I think, but I think they'll use those-" He nodded at the sword, the solder grinned. "- if they have to."  His father looked back at the blazing ship, and then at the track through the forest.

"Haven't got much choice, 'ave we."  He said, more subdued.

"Not unless y'want to end up skewered like a spine-tail."  Kara replied, referring to the practise of catching stingrays with harpoons to avoid being hit by the spine.  His father grimaced and nodded, understanding perfectly. 
He sighed, and resigned himself to following the Luciferi soldiers.  They walked in single-file, a soldier at either end with Kara and Otaw in the middle.  Three more soldiers pushed the fire-spewing device along the track after them.  Kara looked over his shoulder at it as they walked, noting the design.  He guessed that the canvas-coated box at the rear of the device was a bellows, which forced air into the centre chambers.  There were three, he saw; a small one to begin with, with a pipe leading to a larger chamber in the middle, and a canister after that.  The canister lead into an elaborately decorated pipe, which twisted and curved to match its ornamentation; the entire device was draped in worked metal to look like a dragon, rearing up and breathing fire upon its victims.  Golden claws gripped the four wheels of the machine, which trundled forward, crushing the plants in its path, or burning them where needed.  The three soldiers operating the device wore different uniforms to the soldiers who had arrested him and his father.  They wore blue tunics over their shimmering silk shirts, lined with gold thread. 

They walked for nearly an hour in silence, barring the crashing of the machine and the grunting of the three soldiers pushing it.  The track turned and twisted as it avoided large clumps of trees that, judging by their scorched bark, had proven too difficult to burn through, and rocky patches that the machine couldn't manoeuvre over.  Shortly thereafter, they came to a clearing that had also seen the machine’s use, as burnt stumps of trees littered the area, and the smell of smoke still hung heavy in the air.  In the centre of the clearing were rows and rows of tents, surrounded by a low wall of sharpened stakes and a ditch.  Rocks had been broken up and laid down as a sort of paving, and more soldiers and civilians patrolled the area, all with the same blond hair, cut either close to the head, or worn in a braided ponytail.

Kara and Otaw were brought to a halt as the soldiers accompanying them stopped at the entrance to the clearing.  The machine rolled on, being taken inside the enclosure.  After it had vanished behind the rough fencing, another Luciferi soldier came up to them.  His uniform, unlike the soldiers they had already seen, was beautifully embroidered in gold and crimson threads, on a black tunic and red silk undershirt.  His hair was black, in sharp contrast to the blond they were used to seeing.  However, he shared the same eyes as his brethren, a striking emerald green that seemed to look right through you, and showed great intelligence.  He looked at the two Shipwrights for a brief moment, and turned to the soldiers standing at their elbows, speaking quickly to them and waving them away.

He turned back to Otaw and Kara and shocked them when he spoke to them in their own language, but fluently, unlike the halting speech of the soldiers.

“I am the ‘Admiral’ your escorts spoke of.  The term is not, strictly speaking, correct, but it is the closest rank we could find in your language.  I see that one of my men has not returned, which is unfortunate.  However, I ought to congratulate you, killing a Luciferi is no easy feat.  Of course, we never declare them dead.  A soldier lost on the field is just that, ‘lost’.  The record states that no Luciferi has ever been slain in battle, and it will remain that way.”





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Re: Advent: Gaia's Renewal - The Shipwrights and The Dragons
« Reply #5 on: February 03, 2010, 10:32:29 am »
(( lol double post))

~~~

The Luciferi smirked, and beckoned to another soldier who was passing by.  He gave him an order, and the soldier complied by removing the manacles that bound the Shipwright’s wrists.

“I trust you do not intend to ‘lose’ me any more of my men, so for now you may have your freedom of movement returned to you.  But forgive me, I am forgetting my manners.”  The ‘Admiral’ continued, before bowing.  “I am His Excellence’s… Serpent, Kai-Ren Riverdare.  I am in command of this colony and the First… Serpent Fleet of Jupara.”

Kara rubbed his wrists as he replied, looking around.  “You hesitated before saying ‘serpent’.  Not the right term either?”

“No, but you do not seem to have an equivalent, so it will do.” Kai-Ren answered, nodding to the soldier who had unbound them.  He bowed and left the three alone, returning to his patrol.  “Your similar appearance would lead me to presume you are father and son?” Kai-Ren asked, looking directly at Kara.

Kara looked at his father, who remained sullen.

“Yes, we are.  … You’re not going to kill us, are you?”  He answered.  At this, Otaw turned to Kara and snapped at him.

“Of course they’re gonna kill us!  They destroyed me boat an’ tha’ village, an’ they’ll kill us while we’re ‘ere!”

Kai-Ren smirked.  “Actually, my orders are to kill no one.  I believe there were no casualties in the attack on your kin’s village.  We did not intend to strike them, either, but our orders are also to keep this little operation hidden.  They strayed a little too close in their hunting.  In all honesty, I am surprised you hadn’t noticed the smoke rising from the forest before now.”

Kara shrugged.  “A lot of the islands around ‘ere are volcanic.  Jus’ thought it was another one.  But if you’re not gonna kill us, why capture us?”

Otaw spoke up again.  “Trophies!  We’ll be paraded aroun’ an’ shown off, then ‘ee’ll kill us when no one’s watchin’ an’ say we got ‘lost’!”

Kai-Ren gave Otaw a stern glare.  “Half-right.  You saw the machines and slew one of the bearers, so you are to be taken to Jupara and presented to His Excellency.  It will prove to him that we are making progress here.  However, you won’t be alone; the hunting party from the floating village will accompany you on the voyage.  I am afraid that you will be at His Excellency’s mercy once you arrive.  Rest assured, he will probably let you live.”

“An’ who ‘is ‘His Hexcellency’, eh?” Otaw put the question directly to Kai-Ren, staring him in the eyes.  The Luciferis returned the stare, and Otaw found it harder and harder forcing himself not to look away.  Finally, Kai-Ren turned his back to Otaw and replied, while Otaw inwardly breathed a sigh of relief.

“His Excellency, Long Kura; Emperor of Jupara, Lord Protector of the Luciferi and Ferryman of the Dragon’s Waters.”

Kara furrowed his brow. “Dragon?  What’s a dragon?” He asked, the word sounding strange to his mind.  Kai-Ren swung on his heel and turned to face Kara.

“What I meant by ‘serpent’.  The machine you saw, that breathes fire that burns on the water, it is built in the shape of a dragon.  It is also my title as a commanding noble of Jupara.  But now I believe we have been suitably acquainted.”  He spoke, before beckoning to two more of his men.  “These men will take you to your quarters within the camp while we prepare to make sail for Jupara.  We will sail at noon tomorrow.”





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Re: Advent: Gaia's Renewal - The Shipwrights and The Dragons
« Reply #6 on: February 10, 2010, 04:47:10 pm »
(( lol triple post))

~~~
The two soldiers led Kara and Otaw away, through the gates of the fortified camp and past rows of tents, all capable of holding at least four men comfortably.  Some of the tents were bigger, Kara noticed, and some were decorated with dyes and paints and stitched designs.  They were led past all these to the rear of the camp, where one large tent, bigger than the others, had been set up.  Ducking through the opening flap, Kara saw that it was held up by means of a collapsible wooden structure, resembling a frame for a small house.  Inside he counted over a dozen of his kin, lounging on plush silk cushions or lying on their sleeping bags, eating from bowls of fruit, gleaned from the island.  At the very back of the tent Kara saw one man turning a spit on which a now unidentifiable chunk of meat from some animal was slowly being roasted, the smoke exiting the tent through a hole cut in the canvas roof above.  For prisoners, they seemed very well cared for.

Later that evening, having explored the camp by himself, he put the question to one of his fellow Shipwrights, a hunter who had been out on the party that had disappeared some weeks earlier.

“Why are they treating us like guests?  Looking at the soldier’s tents, I think we get better food than they do.  And they let us walk around freely, s’long as we don’t try and leave without an escort.” He asked the hunter, who was trying to break into a coconut.

“Well, s’what their emperor said, innit?  ‘Yer not to kill ‘em’, s’what ‘ee said.  So we’re their guests, fer now.  Tell y’what, personally I’m enjoyin’ it.  Ain’t got much back on board the village, jus’ a small fletchin’ an’ carvin’ workship, no family t’speak of.  So, me?  Lookin’ forward ta seein’ this ‘Jupara’.”  He answered, taking a hinged stone knife from his belt and flicking it open, cutting at the coconut’s shell.  “’Sides…” He added, finally breaking into the soft flesh and milk. “They ‘aven’t killed us an’ likely ain’ gonna, so where’s tha worry?”

Kara nodded, absent-mindedly taking a rough, red fruit from the bowl, which bore marks where spine-like leaves had been cut from it.  He was about to take a bite when he realised he had no clue what it was.  He gestured the thing at the hunter, who was taking long gulps of milk from the coconut.

“What’s this?  Not seen one o’ these before.”  He said, turning it over in his hands.  The hunter wiped his mouth on the back of his wrist.

“Oh, tha’?  S’called a ‘dragonfruit’.  Grow ‘em in Jupara.  Needs t’be skinned first ‘fore y’can eat it.  ‘Ere, give’s it.”  He answered, taking the fruit from Kara.  He stabbed once with his knife and made a clean incision around the width of the fruit, peeling back the skin and revealing a round, red pulp in the middle.  He then passed it back to Kara, who peered at the fruit a little uncertainly before taking a bite from it. 

“Tastes… Different.”  He said at last, smacking his lips.

“Yeh, but they eat normal things there too.  Got fish an’ seaweed, same as us.  Odd way o’ fishin’ though, ‘pparently.  But y’ll see it when y’get there.  Coconut?”  The hunter offered Kara half of the coconut, which he took and ate, before returning to his sleeping bag, next to his father, who was still sullen and had refused to eat, or even leave the tent since they’d been brought there.  He ignored Kara’s presence, and when his son tried to speak to him, he turned around, showing his back to him.  Kara sighed and laid back on the sleeping bag, which he was surprised to find was well-padded and very comfortable, although not quite the same as the hammock he normally slept in.  He had trouble falling asleep without the rhythmic rolling and pitching he had known nearly every night of his life, but eventually he felt himself tiring, and drifted into sleep.

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Re: Advent: Gaia's Renewal - The Shipwrights and The Dragons
« Reply #7 on: March 18, 2010, 10:59:45 pm »
((lol quadruple post))

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Chapter 2:

Mata-I Kara awoke to sunlight streaming through the open tent-flap.  He pulled himself up and looked around him at the now mostly-empty tent.  Bedding was strewn around the floor, and some people were still cocooned in their sheets, and at least one Shipwright had found the ground too uncomfortable to sleep on and was swinging back and forth in a hammock strung between the poles.  Kara stumbled over to the smoking hearth, rubbing his eyes and yawning.  The fire had almost died, but a fire sparks remained buried in the ash and cinders.  On top of the pile of ash, on a metal platter that was still warm to the touch, was some fried fish laid out for breakfast.  Most of the others had already eaten, and the platter was nearly empty, but Kara took a chunk of fish for himself and his father, taking it over to where the older fisherman lay in bed, staring at the canvas ceiling with a glare that could spear a shark clean through.  Kara's attempts at conversation were cut dead by his father's sulking silence, so he left the fish next to his bed and strode out into the main camp.

He walked past the tents of soldiers, some empty, some full of supplies or requisitioned for the officers private quarters and filled with trinkets and belongings from their homes.  He was nearing the gate when a hand was laid on his shoulder and he was forcefully spun around.  Facing him was the military commander, Kai-Ren, one hand on his sword, the other firmly on Kara's shoulder.

"You weren't thinking of trying to leave unattended, were you?" Kai-Ren spoke, calmly, but the meaning behind the words was as blunt as the flat of his sword.  Kara shook his head, beginning to lose feeling in his arm.  Kai-Ren's grip slackened and he looked to be more at ease. "You and the other... guests of his Excellency, are due to sail out soon, as you know.  So, I'd suggest instead of sight-seeing, you ought to rouse your father."  He pointed back towards the tent where Kara had slept, and Kara reluctantly followed orders, walking back through the camp and into the tent.  His father hadn't moved since he'd left, and was still lying on his back, staring up with a sullen expression.  Kara noted that he hadn't touched the fish.

He sat down, cross-legged, next to him.  The two sat in silence for a few moments, before Kara sighed loudly and turned to Otaw.

“Oh, come on, dad.  They said they weren't gonna kill us.  We're safe 'ere.  An' look at the way they've treated the others, they're probably better fed 'ere than they are back on board.”  Kara said, pleading with his father.

Otaw looked up at him, glared, and turned over, putting his back to Kara. 

“By all the Names, what've y'got to moan about?”  Kara said, more exasperated now than pleading.  “Good food, good bedding, promise of bein' kept alive, an' it's not like they're gonna miss us back on board the town.  Probably won't even notice that another fisherman an' his son 'ave gone missing.”
Otaw lurched out of the bed and threw off the bedding.  “Yer jus' a coward like the rest of 'em!  They're comin' 'ere ta take what's ours an' kill us, or, if that bloody commander's righ', t'be paraded aroun' like animals an' then what?  They're not jus' gonna let us walk away free!  An' besides, I was born an' raised in these waters, it ain' right t'jus' give up and let 'em take us, what about yer mother, eh?  Her Name's in this water, not whatever foul sludge they call ocean up in their country.  Jus' gonna leave her too, are ya?”  He spat out, glaring at Kara and getting up from the bed.

Kara thought for a moment.  His father was right, his mother had died a couple of years previously, and had been buried at sea, as was the Shipwright's way.  Her Name would remain in the water and live on,  joining the Names of the departed and the Great Names of the Ships.  Kara got up and rubbed his leg to soften the pins and needles.  He turned back to his father, who was dressing himself.

“We'll take mum with us, then.”  He said, and walked out of the tent.  The Shipwrights were primarily a nomadic people, but the dead stayed where they were buried.  Small island chains were dedicated to these burials, and the waters around these islands were full of bones.  However, wherever the Name travelled, it was always bound to the waters where its body lay, or so it was believed.  The Shipwright's lifestyle required constant movement around the ocean to sustain life and prevent over-fishing, but understandably, not all the Shipwrights found it so easy to leave their loved ones behind on the Bone Islands.  And so, special containers and caskets were created by Shipwright craftsmen to hold the burial waters.  Where the water was spilled, there the Name would travel also.

Kara had recognised one of the prisoners from the night before as one such craftsman.  He scoured the camp to look for him, and eventually found him in a corner of the camp, whittling away at a piece of wood with a coral-handled knife.  Metal was a rare resource for the Shipwrights and was kept for important tasks, items and professions.  The craftsmen had the rare privilege of owning metal-bladed knives and tools, rather than the crude, though effective, stone implements the hunters used.

Kara sat beside the craftsman, who looked up from his work and smiled, laying down the wood.  “What ya after then, boy?”  He asked.

“I need you to make me a flask... For burial water.” Kara replied.  The old craftsman laughed, his face creased with wrinkles. 

“Haven't had someone ask me fer one of those for... Oh, quite a time.  You're in luck though, I've got an unfinished one back in me tent.  Gimme a day and I'll have it fixed up fer ya.  Won't be as flashy as an Admiral's, but it'll do the job.”  He grinned again.  “That all?”

Kara smirked.  “That's all, thanks.”  He rose and went to find the commander.





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Re: Advent: Gaia's Renewal - The Shipwrights and The Dragons
« Reply #8 on: March 19, 2010, 04:55:26 pm »
C-C-C-C-C-COMBO BREAKER!

lol. Good job on the story, the writing style is quite nice.



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Re: Advent: Gaia's Renewal - The Shipwrights and The Dragons
« Reply #9 on: June 04, 2010, 10:09:12 pm »
lolrevive. 

Decided I didn't like this so I'm re-writing it from the start.  Will update as I complete sections.





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« Reply #10 on: June 06, 2010, 08:27:13 pm »
:P  I read it all and I get to the bottom to find out your restarting it.  Oh well, it was a good read, I like the writing style a lot.